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Mini-DVD Meme Rides Again
I was going to stay up till midnight so this would be posted tomorrow, but I'm groggy. Anyway, this is going around, and I thought, why not?
Pick a passage from my stories, up to 500 words, from anything I've written in this journal, and comment to this post with that selection (including a link to the story being excerpted). I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the story, awful puns [perhaps], and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track.
Like Petra over at Dreamwidth I reserve the right to lie egregiously about anything over 3 years old. My stories are listed by character (and sometimes topic) here: http://rubynye.livejournal.com/tag/
Pick a passage from my stories, up to 500 words, from anything I've written in this journal, and comment to this post with that selection (including a link to the story being excerpted). I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the story, awful puns [perhaps], and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track.
Like Petra over at Dreamwidth I reserve the right to lie egregiously about anything over 3 years old. My stories are listed by character (and sometimes topic) here: http://rubynye.livejournal.com/tag/
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"So you are not a breeding pair?" chirrups the foremost Chertian, waggling one shiny blue-and-black forelimb in a confused manner.
God, it was fun, from figuring out Chertian gestures onwards.
From the corner of his eye, Captain Pike of the USS Qín Jiŭshào
... because English is only 'Standard' because Star Trek was written, filmed and aired in the USA...
sees Lieutenant nee Cadet Kirk shimmying, not in struggle against the overhead manacles but because Jim's laughing, his generous mouth shut tightly over barely stifled merriment.
*cackles* I love seeing Jim through the eyes of anyone simultaneously annoyed with and attracted to him, which is damn near everyone.
Pike lifts his chin, ignores Kirk's ridiculousness, and addresses their puzzled captor. "No, we're not, but we'll be happy to tell you all about Terran practices if you release us and return our uniforms and gear."
A simple, reasonable trade, presented in captainly fashion. Why can't anyone just listen to him?
The Chertian shuffles its four hindlegs in ambiguous acknowledgement and steps back to confer with its three smaller companions.
Thus allowing Pike a moment to contemplate, and the author a moment to tell the reader WTF is going on here.
stripped naked (at which Kirk shows an annoying lack of discomfort),
This is one of my favorite lines I've ever written.
Including mating. Of course.
Did the resigned little sigh of "it's just one of THOSE days" come through?
It was supposed to be a simple training cruise, a field trip of a survey mission.
I had a line in here baldly stating "except that Pike made the mistake of taking Kirk," but I yanked it.
At least Kirk's controlled himself enough to not display arousal. Just not enough to not laugh.
AHAHAHAHA poor Captain Pike. Poor him.
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Ahahaha, yes. :) I think there's an element of that in just about every Jim/anybody story I've ever written too.
*snorfle* Yes. Poor Captain Pike indeed—his life is so hard, what with the pervy aliens and Jim Kirk wanting to blow him. (Wait a second....)