Mini-DVD Meme Rides Again

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I was going to stay up till midnight so this would be posted tomorrow, but I'm groggy. Anyway, this is going around, and I thought, why not?

Pick a passage from my stories, up to 500 words, from anything I've written in this journal, and comment to this post with that selection (including a link to the story being excerpted). I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the story, awful puns [perhaps], and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track.

Like Petra over at Dreamwidth I reserve the right to lie egregiously about anything over 3 years old. My stories are listed by character (and sometimes topic) here: http://rubynye.livejournal.com/tag/

Comments

Re: MiniDVD - The Bargain

[rubynye.livejournal.com]

I'm especially glad you picked this, because I relish the chance to write about how I write rape scenes. For the same reason, though, I've screened this, because I don't want someone else to stumble unwillingly on this excerpt. For the same reason, I've run this through the Rotate-13 generator here, which will also decode it.

"Fhpu n cerggl travhf," Rqtregba nafjref uvz, chfuvat vagb uvz nf vs uvf bja obql qbrfa'g rira orybat gb uvz, svyyvat uvz jvgu cnva.

Tbq, guvf znxrf zr jvapr gb erernq, juvpu yrgf zr xabj V qvq vg evtug. Bar guvat V erzrzore jnf srryvat gnxra sebz zlfrys, ubj rira zl bja obql qvqa'g orybat gb zr nalzber, naq vg'f n qrgnvy V qenj ba jura jevgvat aba-pba. V thrff, nf n jnl bs bjavat vg.

"Lbh arire pnyphyngrq guvf, qvq lbh?" Rqtregba'f fjrng fbnxf vagb Puneyvr'f fxva, gbb qrrc gb fpeho bhg. "Lbh arire vzntvarq fbzrbar yvxr zr."

Rqtregba vf na rivy onfgneq, naq rawblvat shpxvat jvgu gurve zvaqf. Vs nyy ur jnagrq jnf Puneyvr'f obql ur pbhyq unir whfg noqhpgrq uvz nybar; ur tenoorq gurz obgu gb shpx jvgu gurve urnqf gbb.

Ur unqa'g, ur ernyyl unqa'g. Puneyvr srryf uvf obql orvat fubirq vagb, uvf zvaq oernxvat bcra, gur jbeyq pehzoyvat.

V jevgr va gevcyrgf n ybg. V yvxr gur rzcunfvf bs ercrgvgvba; gjvpr vfa'g rabhtu, sbhe gbb zhpu.

Gura ur urnef n zhssyrq fbo gung vfa'g uvf. Jura ur ybbxf hc Rqtregba vf tevggvat uvf grrgu, rlrf aneebjrq gb fyvgf, naq orlbaq uvf fubhyqre Qba vf jngpuvat. Fahssyvat, purfg urnivat, fgehttyvat sbe nve guebhtu gur fbnxrq tnt, uvf rlrf ba Puneyvr.

Gur Rccrf oebguref, havgrq ntnvafg nal naq rirelguvat, rira guvf!

Ur arire jbhyq'ir jnagrq uvz urer, ohg gurl ner urer gbtrgure. Puneyvr unf uvf oebgure jvgu uvz, ur'f abg nybar.

V xrrc guvaxvat V ynvq vg ba gbb guvpx urer, ohg V fgvyy yvxr guvf yvar. Ol vaibyivat gurz obgu Rqtregba vanqiregragyl fgeratgurarq gurz.

Puneyvr pna'g fgbc funxvat, jvapvat nhqvoyl jura Rqtregba chyyf bhg bs uvz, pheyvat hc nebhaq gur cbhaqrq-bhg npur vafvqr uvz naq inthryl jbaqrevat ubj ur unfa'g guebja hc lrg. Ur jnagf gb fnl, "gung'f guerr, abj yrg hf tb," gb svaq gur arnerfg fubjre naq fpbhe uvzfrys, ohg vg frrzf vzcbffvoyr gb rira oerngur fhpprffshyyl.

Cbbe Puneyvr. V gevrq ernyyl uneq gb qrcvpg gur haerny, funggrerq srryvat bs fubpx urer, juvpu vf -- ng bapr ohearq vagb zl zrzbel naq ernyyl qvssvphyg gb pbureragyl erzrzore.

"V xarj V'q unir gur zbfg sha jvgu lbh oblf," Rqtregba fnlf, gur fngvfsnpgvba va uvf ibvpr yvxr npvq ba enj fxva. Qba gevrf gb lryy guebhtu uvf tnt, ohg vg pbzrf bhg zhssyrq naq zbnayvxr; Puneyvr whfg pyhgpurf uvzfrys gvtugre, fuhqqrevat gbb uneq gb zbir.

Guvf yvar vf n dhbgngvba sebz gur GI fubj, sebz pnaba!Rqtregba; fbzrguvat V yrnearq urer gung fgbbq zr va tbbq fgrnq jura jevgvat Fgne Gerx Zveebeirefr vf gung rirel fb bsgra bar fubhyq erzrzore gung n zveebe-ersyrpgvba vf obgu na bccbfvgr naq n gjva.

Re: MiniDVD - The Bargain

[lilacs-roses.livejournal.com]

Taking your suggestion, I ran this through that same generator as well. Not sure how it translates to you so, if you get two of these, forgive me please.

Lbh jebgr:
Bar guvat V erzrzore jnf srryvat gnxra sebz zlfrys, ubj rira zl bja obql qvqa'g orybat gb zr nalzber, naq vg'f n qrgnvy V qenj ba jura jevgvat aba-pba. V thrff, nf n jnl bs bjavat vg.

Jvgu gur jnl gung vf jevggra… vg znxrf vg fbhaq nf vs lbh fheivirq tbvat guebhtu fbzrguvat fvzvyne naq vs gung’f gehr…. /uhttf /pbzsbeg /fhccbeg….


Lbh qvq n snagnfgvp wbo bs gheavat bhe orybirq favcre vagb ‘na rivy onfgneq.’ V pna ernyyl frr gung cbgragvny va uvz naq jbaqre jung vg jbhyq gnxr gb znxr uvz oernx be or zbyqrq vagb fbzrguvat yvxr gung. Jura V qrpvqrq gb sbphf zber ba Vna Rqtregba sbe zl fgbevrf, V eragrq/obeebjrq/jngpurq frireny bs YQC’f zbivrf, nf V jnagrq gb frr zber bs jung ur jnf pncnoyr bs nf na npgbe, nf n punenpgre naq… V’q erpbzzraq frireny bs gurz, rfcrpvnyyl gur barf gung ner ‘rzbgvbany’ be gung *qb* fubj gur qnexre punenpgref ur’f cynlrq. Gung fnvq, V guvax bar bs gur orfg jnf ‘Arire Sbetrg’ -- uggc://jjj.vzqo.pbz/gvgyr/gg0893411/ -- juvpu, nppbeqvat gb VZQO, vf nobhg n zna jub jnxrf hc jvgu nzarfvn nyfb svaqf uvf fhccbfrq sevraq unf npphfrq uvz bs zheqre.


Crefbanyyl, V guvax gur gevcyrgf guvat ernyyl jbexf. V guvax V’ir qbar fbzrguvat fvzvyne n gvzr be gjb, nf jryy.

Qrfcvgr rirelguvat, gurfr gjb – guerr vs lbh pbhag Nyna – ner havgrq va znal guvatf. Orvat jvgubhg snzvyl zlfrys, V ernyyl… V ybir gur nfcrpg bs gung. Ubj gurl fhccbeg naq ybir rnpu bgure, rira jura gurl qba’g yvxr rnpu bgure ng gvzrf be gung gurl qba’g ‘fnl’ vg zhpu.

V ybir gung yvar nf jryy naq, V ernyyl qvqa’g guvax bs vg nf ynlvat vg ba guvpx, whfg gung lbh jrer znxvat n cbvag. Naq lrf, vs Rqtregba unq gnxra gurz fvatyl… /abqf… Ur fgeratgurarq gurz. Jvgubhg xabjvat vg? Znlor.

Ntnva, nabgure yvar gung znxrf zr guvax lbh’ir tbar guebhtu fbzrguvat fvzvyne naq V whfg unir gb fnl /uhttf /fhccbeg /pbzsbeg.

Nlr, hfvat fprarf, qvnybthr, rgp sebz gur npghny pnaba vf n terng jnl gb ervasbepr gur svp nf jryy nf znxr vg fb pbaarpgrq gb jung jr frr naq urne ba fnvq fubj be fhpu.

Gunaxf fb zhpu sbe qbvat guvf!! V ybirq yrneavat nyy guvf :)

Re: MiniDVD - The Bargain

[rubynye.livejournal.com]

*beams at you and hugs you* Thanks. It was a long time ago, and life is too often like that, but anyway.

So you said (un rotated, because I love the sentiment), "Being without family myself, I really… I love the aspect of that. How they support and love each other, even when they don’t like each other at times or that they don’t ‘say’ it much." I know JUST what you mean, not least as someone estranged from my family. I love that about the show, the core the three Eppes men make.

Thank you very much for asking for this. :D