Labor Day Meme: Stories That Never Were

[browngirl]

From petronelle, who filled this in glorious manner. Give me the title of a story I've never written, and feedback telling me what you liked best about it, and I will tell you any of: the first sentence, the last sentence, the thing that made me want to write it, the biggest problem I had while writing it, why it almost never got posted, the scene that hit the cutting room floor but that I wish I'd been able to salvage, or something else that I want readers to know.

Feel free to try any fandom you have reason to think I know, but if I don't at all know the fandom I'll have to say so.

Comments

[dreamflower]

Your beautiful drabble of the moment when Pippin catches Pervinca's eye after his return home, and his realization that his family, his sisters, did not come through the Troubles unscathed, his feeling of failure that makes him think of Frodo-- and then the end with his cheerfully cheeky last line-- an attempt to cheer Pervinca up and lighten the moment in true hobbit fashion, well it just brought tears to my eyes.

I know you wrote it for Dana, but it felt like you wrote it for me.

I had to think for awhile to remember my Pippin.

[rubynye.livejournal.com]

The first sentence: Pippin stepped forward, and his sister looked at him.
The last sentence: "Well, it wouldn't be the Shire without mushrooms," said Pippin, watching sidelong as Pervinca smiled.
The thing that made me want to write it: I wrote Merry realizing how his kin had suffered without him by conversing with his cousin Beri, so I had to give Pippin an equivalent story with his sister.
The biggest problem I had while writing it: I had several false starts. For instance...
The scene that hit the cutting room floor: Not a scene, but the first line was originally a more straightforwardly symbolic statement about Pervinca's restrained hairstyle when she'd previously worn it loose.
Anything else: AHAHAHA I almost had to go and write the whole drabble just to answer this. Well played! *grins and hugs you*

Re: I had to think for awhile to remember my Pippin.

[dreamflower]

*LOL!* You know, I didn't realize until you said that, that I *was* trying to tempt you! I miss your hobbits a lot!

And a perfect last line. Thank you, dear!